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Nick Winney's avatar

I'm making sounds that I don't know how to spell.

Ok - so - it took me a while to get to comment on this exquisite thing - because I have been sucked into a SUKEBAN wormhole - for which I must thank you.

I found this -

https://youtu.be/gaP-E3qWPqM?si=vopyjpg2x8N4vjF2

how perfect is that? If only I could find the actual film....

So back to the writing. Does it matter I always say this about what you write - that it is unparalled in the way it conjures visual worlds through utterly unique word combinations that scream out their liquidity and defy any suggestion of calculated construction. It's pure essence.

This work DOES something different, if I may dare to suggest - it does tell a story in a much more coherent way than I think anything else I have read of yours does. It's just fantastic - lesbians, violence, horror, love, betrayal, fangs, yearning, striving, submitting defying. Surreal, but also clear; mysterious and also direct. I think the film in my head woudl be very much the same as the film that was in yours when you wrote this - the words create more feelings I think, becasue the story is more there in front of us, and not just hinted at.

Was looking for a restack, but I can't choose one - it all stands out and glows with inner energy.

I did have some prompt words, but you have so many to go at I'll sit back on them in case you grow to feel overburdened.

私のフェズ帽のフェルトは喜びの涙で濡れている

Edith Bow's avatar

This was more direct because I am not Marukami. But if you think of the culture. It's more direct but subtle. Everything is about balance right. Story kept coming as it was happening. I am not overburdened with prompts hence the last restack. To me this creative with the breaker picture of the Hannya mask was very specific. Hannya is specific to women.

I plan to keep writing all the way through to Jan.

I learned about Sukebans in the 90s, I am surprised I didn't write anything until now but, I guess it didn't feel right back then. I would not call myself an expert by any means, I would say I have intermediate cultural experience through very specific friendships who were/are close to me. I often thought of how they would interact in the time period and the position. It was multiple personalities clustered into one.

Emily S Hurricane's avatar

Holy shit 👏👏👏 sexy, horrific, absorbing

Edith Bow's avatar

It was incredibly engaging for me to write. Hikari forever. 💜

Colton Merris's avatar

Shit now I gotta wait 3 or 4 days before I can drop a story since everyone's going to be talking about this for a minute.

Edith Bow's avatar

Nah you good. Run your shit. I have to write another prompt in 2 days. I have like 10 or so prompts I'm doing by 2 day intervals.

troy adkins's avatar

your style reminds me of the wellspring of creativity in early childhood that we lose with age, something we all wish we could access and here you do.

or maybe i just haven't done enough drugs

Edith Bow's avatar

I don't think it's lost. You just gotta find your groove. I know some older folks who can write me under a table. I appreciate the compliment!

The Wayback Machine's avatar

This is that real shit right here

JLG Noga's avatar

this actually might be my favorite piece from u, not least bc it combines ur excellent style with the yakuza (who doesnt love the yakuza?). feels like a feminine mishima turned inside out. thematically this resonates with me bc it revolves around a lot of my own preoccupations: family, fate, fucking, fighting, etc. and if i may be so presumptuous, i do think that this piece in particular acts as a solid companion to my own yakuza crime/horror yarn i spun a few months ago. lowkey serendipitous reading this now

Edith Bow's avatar

To further my note sukeban girl gangs happened because they were excluded from Yakuza. It was more like deliquent girl gangs. Some of it may have overlapped for power or money as things does but they predominantly all female gang(s).

Edith Bow's avatar

I grew up around a lot of Japanese people who took me under their wing, I mean one of my adopted mothers is called Mama San who definitely judges the shit out of me for not having a career yet 😂 I am way too honest about my emotions, she hates it but never tells me. She's the only one who gets me to eat mushrooms because her look is so serious. It feels like it's piercing my soul.

Culturally, on the island I would like some parts of it food wise. I mean I can make ramen shoyu from scratch if I had the tools. But, I know a lot of the roles as a vocal bisexual woman wouldn't fit for me there so visiting only. I wrote the shame/family part for my best friend who will not be reading this because she hates horror, but would find it cathartic. I have met one Yakuza on a random occasion actually, he did not say shit to me but I was with a sake distributor and he happened to be there. We drank a lot of sake. I love sake. California is a weird place sometimes. I have not read enough on Yakuza history that's more of Emil's thing. Their Japanese is a whole different language it's slurred and burly. I would not fuck with Yakuza though. When I trained martial arts I preferred a lot of samurais because yes. I can use their swords. I attempted their language once but my kanji sucks. My hands are too shaky for perfection. One day I'll tour the islands. But there's other parts of Asia I want to see too. Pretty much all of it.

Sukeban girl gangs in Japan were fuckin dope during the 70s-80s. This is what it surrounds, but I add in a lot of culture from what I have experienced from friends, so this was easy for me to get into the moment.

MA Knight's avatar

THANK YOU!!!! You went in a direction that I couldn’t have guessed yet it felt so inevitable and delicious. I’ll be revisiting this again and again. ❤️‍🔥 This is my kind of worship!!!

Edith Bow's avatar

I also will be revisiting it again and again. I really LOVED writing this piece. It felt so real. ps I love your lesbian werewolves too. Will be reading more of that.

MA Knight's avatar

Agh! I’m thrilled!