Too many good lines...I peaked too soon with the restack. Its monumentally great, and I love the solidity of the story...like granite but there's quartz vein and gold cutting through it where the stream of consciousness wordplay shines.
its a skeleton you could hang a body of work from.
"Thimble sized clit?" - yes please. Can I have that to go?
You can retack as many lines as you want Nick, no one is stopping you. But maybe stay away from the smutt cause apparently your sub base is a bunch of dweebs about blowhorns.
This was a much more cohesive story than my usual metaphoric prose. I think Clevengers dialogue workshop finally hit me with this piece.
hooked
This was a fun story to write.
fun story to read
It's flowing so well, hypnotically heading to part 2.
I'm very proud of my dialogue in this one.
🧍🏻
Too many good lines...I peaked too soon with the restack. Its monumentally great, and I love the solidity of the story...like granite but there's quartz vein and gold cutting through it where the stream of consciousness wordplay shines.
its a skeleton you could hang a body of work from.
"Thimble sized clit?" - yes please. Can I have that to go?
You can retack as many lines as you want Nick, no one is stopping you. But maybe stay away from the smutt cause apparently your sub base is a bunch of dweebs about blowhorns.
This was a much more cohesive story than my usual metaphoric prose. I think Clevengers dialogue workshop finally hit me with this piece.
yes. the dialogue was pretty. 🫡
Well done. Good work.
Who smokes Lucky Strikes with a filter?
In Europe there was no filter however. And it was extra snacks with my wine.
I do because I hate the shavings in my mouth. I would always have to toothpick them out drove me crazy.
You aren't wrong. I like the cut of your jib.
Damn. I gotta come back and read again . But this line -Welcome to the American dream. Everyone dies, and they’ll die hungry.
It hits too close to home I know it.