Like a late christmas present! has been delicious wondering what the prompt might bring out and its my favourite kinda business! dystopia coloured in with violence and robots by Edith Bow.
The sentient lizard is beyond my wildest desires. Conversation with it an absolute squirm
Gnashing for part 2. If this is our future, can it come soon?
I would very much love a murderous venomous large komodo dragon by my side. Wait, I sort of have one. This future has potential, it's still pretty bleak. The rich wear human skin, poor people live in a trash city where it burns 24/7. But it does have hope so there's also that. Much better where we are right now in early stage fascism.
I will be working on pt 2 all day tomorrow. I haven't even written it yet. I'm playing the film as it comes. Hope to go a bit unhinged. 💜
It's all I'm doing today other than reading a few pieces. Love that about the dialogue. Craig Clevengers workshop on dialogue with Television Sky really helped with me with action dialogue. Forever grateful. Still playin' with it.
Felt like being dropped into a city that’s already halfway eaten. The intimacy is genuinely unsettling in the best way, like the world has rotted, but the bonds haven’t stopped being tender.
Also: Alucard as last dragon / terrible puppy / ethical problem / roommate? Wreckage. Darkly amusing and densely tragic: how ordinary all of this feels to the narrator. Like apocalypse as dog-walking logistics.
Pt 2 will drop today at some point. Maybe in an hour or two. When I write it's usually fully made up world's. Abrupt and intense.
In my head Alucard was quite silly, but I've grown fond of him. His voice very distinct in my head. These are all excellent compliments & insights. Thank you 💜
if you like Edith's unique style in this piece, E.G., you will undoubtedly love her other work. I've been hooked since the first piece of hers I came across just after I started a stack here about 18 months ago. she's a force.
In my older pieces I would flow between all the POVs somehow and make it work, it's insane. I tried to make it not chaotic like that though at least for scene setting. I'm glad you liked it. Legible is important. That's improvement with dialogue lol.
I wandered in not knowing what to expect, and you blew my morning wide open. Love the dragon and Anisette and the way your dialogue carries this narrative. Cool stuff!
Honestly, I don't know what to expect either when I'm writing it since it comes out of my head line by line. My brain always surprises me. Glad the dialogue hit here thank you 💜
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Like a late christmas present! has been delicious wondering what the prompt might bring out and its my favourite kinda business! dystopia coloured in with violence and robots by Edith Bow.
The sentient lizard is beyond my wildest desires. Conversation with it an absolute squirm
Gnashing for part 2. If this is our future, can it come soon?
I would very much love a murderous venomous large komodo dragon by my side. Wait, I sort of have one. This future has potential, it's still pretty bleak. The rich wear human skin, poor people live in a trash city where it burns 24/7. But it does have hope so there's also that. Much better where we are right now in early stage fascism.
I will be working on pt 2 all day tomorrow. I haven't even written it yet. I'm playing the film as it comes. Hope to go a bit unhinged. 💜
Epic, the dialogue flows like champagne. Looking forward to part 2 😍
It's all I'm doing today other than reading a few pieces. Love that about the dialogue. Craig Clevengers workshop on dialogue with Television Sky really helped with me with action dialogue. Forever grateful. Still playin' with it.
me too. 100%
Felt like being dropped into a city that’s already halfway eaten. The intimacy is genuinely unsettling in the best way, like the world has rotted, but the bonds haven’t stopped being tender.
Also: Alucard as last dragon / terrible puppy / ethical problem / roommate? Wreckage. Darkly amusing and densely tragic: how ordinary all of this feels to the narrator. Like apocalypse as dog-walking logistics.
Very much enjoyed, and will look up PT 2. Cheers!
Pt 2 will drop today at some point. Maybe in an hour or two. When I write it's usually fully made up world's. Abrupt and intense.
In my head Alucard was quite silly, but I've grown fond of him. His voice very distinct in my head. These are all excellent compliments & insights. Thank you 💜
Abrupt and intense is exactly the right frequency. And yes, silly but ruinous companions are my kryptonite; Alucard absolutely lives.
if you like Edith's unique style in this piece, E.G., you will undoubtedly love her other work. I've been hooked since the first piece of hers I came across just after I started a stack here about 18 months ago. she's a force.
Def checking out some other works on her stack!
It reads like a lost Philip K. Dick, with the trippiest sentences and a snappy dialogue. Can't wait to have part 2!
Fuck yeah! Now that's a compliment. I've always thought I wrote fever dreams. I'll cherish it forever. 💜
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The pacing and rhythm of this piece are fantastic. Nicely done.
Thank you! It's been a ride to say the least.
Fuckin sick. Love Alucard. The moments of second person and sensory descriptions were divine, otherworldly yet always legible
In my older pieces I would flow between all the POVs somehow and make it work, it's insane. I tried to make it not chaotic like that though at least for scene setting. I'm glad you liked it. Legible is important. That's improvement with dialogue lol.
I wandered in not knowing what to expect, and you blew my morning wide open. Love the dragon and Anisette and the way your dialogue carries this narrative. Cool stuff!
Honestly, I don't know what to expect either when I'm writing it since it comes out of my head line by line. My brain always surprises me. Glad the dialogue hit here thank you 💜
The dialogue in this piece snaps crackles and pops. I also love the idea of a giant Komodo Dragon that can talk. Fucking, the DX is immaculate though.