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Emil Ottoman's avatar

And at the end of reading this The Killing Moon started playing in my head.

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ARC's avatar

The prose style here is excellent.

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Edith Bow's avatar

I am honored, thank you. I know fuck all about prose, but I appreciate it regardless. If I ever did rap fiction I would respectfully concede even though, a time limit may be interesting for me. Probably show growth of where I am. How fast I could write.

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ARC's avatar

Writing quickly is just part of the game anyways. It mostly doesn't matter. It only shows your discipline and your ability to big picture come up with a story quickly. But most of the important stuff in writing is in editing anyways. I appreciate the literary work you put on the app.

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Edith Bow's avatar

I have only gotten better at editorial from Emil over a decade, and beta reading, I feel like not enough writer's do beta and think outside the box. It's a great way to look at things from an developmental angle that previously, you wouldn't otherwise. Writing is some real work. I feel like so many people don't realize how hard it is. Wasn't always good. Still getting there. Work in progress. I don't still feel like a writer. I think I would be open to it after school, this semester is killing me. Writing academic politics eats up my creativity juice. I do love a good discipline and seeing where I am at. It's been awhile since I've written under a time limit.

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ARC's avatar

im down to have you at some point. You would make for a great match.

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Emil Ottoman's avatar

So, there's stream of consciousness dribble like you dismantled last night, then there's this. Which is also stream of consciousness.

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ARC's avatar

Exactly. But refined. Intentional. And some of the language is absolutely gorgeous and sticks with you.

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NJ Fiction's avatar

Your nose a dragon’s nostril is so sexy a line! Loved it all

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Nick Winney's avatar

Just sat for a while trying to think what you wrote tastes like in the brain. Hard to say - really liquid this one - I'm getting liquid. And I can almost hear you speaking it. I said more about my gut reaction when I restacked. - As ever, a joy....well when I say "joy"....

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Nick Winney's avatar

haven't read it yet but YESSSSS...more has arrived!

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Jon T's avatar

Did a little backflip here

“You taste the burnt edges in your mouth when you sleep”

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Edith Bow's avatar

I would pay in poetry to see you do a backflip in real time. I feel like most writers feel that way. Don't they? Words fermenting over a fire when we sleep.

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