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Bill Hiatt's avatar

For a stream-of-consciousness exercise, this is amazingly coherent. It does leave a reader with some unanswered questions, but that's part of the point. There's also an amazing amount of detail about the world in which the story takes place. The basic idea could easily become the foundation for a novel.

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Nick Winney's avatar

despite reading a few of your SoCs now, each one brings a different smile and a different sensation. I'm excited to be taking part in the game you are arranging but i am baffled at how you create these torrents of description. I simply will not be capable of such, and i doubt many could.

ponders... so many sentences seem grammatically questionable, or stand-alone, tautological and distinct from the one before and the one after... but bring all of them together and the film begins. like standing with your nose up against a Suerat painting then slowly leaning backwards.

And under all that swirling there is still a recognisable yarn and a story that you want more of... but the paprika and turmeric... i couldnt work them into anything there... what was the spice about?

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